Give me some feedback

I thought it would be fun to test out a paragraph from my upcoming book. Here is your chance to give me some anonymous feedback!

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Mirke dove in after Theo, whose body was drifting to the bottom. Bubbles escaped from the thickets of his fur as he thrust forward through the water. He reached out to his fallen friend, nearly close enough, but a force from above impacted his body. Air from his lungs escaped as he was pushed into the murky depths. A silty mixture of mud and decaying debris puffed up around him. The sticku’s foot pressed heavily on his back, encasing him in the viscous pond floor. Evidently satisfied with the result the sticku lifted its foot. Mirke noticed the release of pressure, but the mud held him captive. He struggled to simply move his arms and his collapsed lungs meant his time was short.

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